Bryanna Krieger 1-1A English Miss. Lehmann 02/13/19 This story is about the time I almost caught my house on fire. It all started when my parents decided to go to a motorcycle event, so they had my older sister, Jordan watch me. I was only five and she was around 17 so she would tease me.I was in the living room playing with my dolls when I got hungry, so I got a snack. I also got myself a paper towel. Then my sister and her friend ran at me with hot sauce. After they finally got it in my mouth, they went to her room. I was mad, but I forgot and went back to playing with my dolls, a fun little activity for me to do. My sister came in the living room and lit one of the candles because she wanted the house to smell good. I watched the flame for a while. I thought it was so pretty the way it glowed and moved when a little bit of air touched it for a while. I just watched it. I wanted to see what would happen if I put my paper towel by it. I kept brushing the towel past the flame little by little, until I dropped my towel on the fire. It was a big fire for me. In a rush of fear, I grabbed the part that wasn’t on fire and threw it on the couch.Then the couch was on fire. I cried. My stomach was turning and my tears just falling. I decided to throw a blanket at the chair,but then I realized that the blanket was my favorite. I grabbed my blanket back, and without thinking, I put the blanket on my leg. I felt this burning painand let out a loud scream. My sister ran out. “What have you done?” “I wanted to see what would happen-”Tears of pain kept pouring out. At that point I noticed why my leg was hurting.The blanket was on fire. My sister called 911, freaking out about the chair on fire since it was by one of the walls.She also worried about my leg, since it looked pretty harmed. her friend helped my sister out. If you think my part of the story is bad, let me tell you how my parents found out. While they were driving motorcycles, someone crashed, so they had to get 911. My parents and I both got the Rupert fire fighters. If 911 can’t get to you they, do the job for them. My dad was friends with the people who were helping with the crash, and well my dad heard the call for help at our address on the radio.They rushed home with the people they were with. Once they got there, my dad tried jumping over the fence and hurt his leg.My mom used the gate. Some people were already there helping and questioning Jordan. I, on the other hand, was getting help for my burn. My dad saw me and Jordan and her friend were okay, so he smiled.Then he started yelling. “Why is there a doctor and firefighters here? What did you guys do?”Jordan had to explain the whole story to my dad, and he got even more upset. “You were supposed to watch her, not do hair and makeup in your room.” For a couple weeks, I had to put a weird burn medication on my leg and a bandageso the burn would heal. Itsucked because it made my burn hurt. Also, my sister started watching me closer, but she still wasn’t nice about it. She would give me swirlies and use hot sauce against me.10 years later I got to see the people who helped me. My dad took me because my mom wasn’t able to go herself because of work. It was fun, but also weird being the youngest one at the party. I got told, “Wow you have grown so much over the years.” I'm thankful that they helped me or something really bad could have happened. It also taught me I shouldn’t mess with things that I don’t know a lot about.
1. List one thing you've learned from writing this paper that you can apply to other writing assignments. What will that look like? I need to use more detail I can apply that to other writing assignments so they can feel what is happing. 2. Identify a specific revision you were asked to make and explain why (this can be at any stage of the writing process). How did you revise? What did you learn? Commas i put the commas where they need to be and it taught me certain areas in the sentences need commas. 3. What are the conventions of a narrative and how did you meet those in this assignment? To be creative I told the story on how me and my family reacted. 4. Given more time to work on this assignment, how would you improve it? I would put in better detail. 5. What is one thing you're proud of in this paper? The way I told the story to make it seem more interesting.